Clave_Dark_5

I think you'll win that bet.

Couldn't you have her pass you the file info in an email via .zip?

Very important point there. I've also found that it's a good idea to close it, then reopen it and check to be sure the changes 'took'. If they haven't yet, close it again, run around the room and try once more. I don't know why, but sometimes it takes a minute or so so update to the newest version.

http://paragonwiki.com/wiki/Main_Page

Look them up, read their powers. Also, I think when you look at each separate foe in the group listing screen inside the MA interface, their powers are mentioned as well.

I write MA arcs to tell the stories that occur to me, not so much for public recognition or to get plays (but of course that's always nice). I don't think that I could write for someone else; I tried it once with an arc challenge Smurphy had up and just couldn't muster enough care, and that was a situation where 'story didn't matter' to boot. Add in my slow pace and a question of how much 'payment' would make it worth my while ("That'll be a dozen LotG +Rech and 500 mill inf please") and it just doesn't seem worth it in my eyes.

That said, might not be a bad idea for some others.

Looks like a frog about to sit on a plank?

Man... I don't even remember doing a security question when I joined up, I hope I can remember it if/when the time comes. :P

Edit: to test, I just went and logged into my account. My questions were about the street I grew up on (not really, but it's an easy one for me to remember) and my dad's middle name, which is easy to spell. I guess I got off lightly compaired to others.

As you may have gathered, Rabbitual Criminal appeared in my two previous arcs which were light-hearted. At the time, I was having fun using him in every arc as a returning character, then I decided to write him out so to speak so I did so in this arc. I wanted the arc to address heroism and the story just came together for me with him in there. Anyways, he apparently didn't really throw you off too much, so it's all good I guess.

Thanks for the typo catch! Perhaps overly colorful language? Guilty as charged, I was trying to establish a bit of atmosphere.

Yeah, the map only allowed placement for them down there after I placed the guys up top to spout the dialogue about "here comes a hero!". I'll take a look at trying to get some dialogue in there to explain why they're in the tunnel.

If I recall, there is something about that that appears in the chat box, which a lot of players of this arc missed (hence this arc being 'troubled'). I was probably trying to be more subtle than I should have and failed. It's a personal failing, I know.

I don't know that game you mention, but I'm glad that moment worked for you. This was one of the points people kept tripping over in earlier versions of the arc; I went back in and tried to clear it all up it and then didn't get any other plays until you came along. Looks like it worked!

Hm, noted as well.

I was having fun with telling the story elements out of order, perhaps not successfully. I'll give Mish 3 another look too, the days of the week idea isn't bad.

Thanks for the spelling catch again, and I'll look for the Capitalization Problem You Mention, as well as some of the stuff you mention for Mish 4.

Ha! Sounds like fun!

He was designed to be fairly doable since this is a low level arc.

SO - to sum up, thanks for the plays and suggestions. One good thing to learn about writing a good AE arc (if I have any legs to stand on on that topic) is that strong, detailed feedback like this seriously helps you in refining your story. Take good notes on the suggestions (as I have here and with other reviews for all my arcs), consider them and decide if they're applicable or not then act on them if they are.

As you've been so kind to spend your time writing this up, I'll be playing your arc when you republish it and as soon as time allows me (tight schedule, little gaming time etc.) and I'll try to drop as detailed a review for you in the other thread.

I'd happily accept that burden if any one of these came to be.

Not surprised as it's no longer the new shiney on the block.

Won't be too surprised if nothing comes out in i20 as well.

Won't be surprised if there is some love for the MA system in i20 either; there's always new stuff they didn't drop hints about during the sneak-peaks.

Oh please, oh please, DO IT DO IT DO IT!

I used to see it on redside Freedom a fair amount, back in the monkey days. I haven't seen much of it lately though. Come to think of it, the last time I saw anyone asking for pay to join a mish, they were running a mayhem. That was maybe a month ago.

I imagine those trying to get people to play are just hoping to siphon up some easy money from players who don't know any better.

Something here isn't adding up.

When I can come up with funny lists like SteelClaw, I'll let you know.

Funnily enough I was already half-thinking of asking if you'd like to do one of mine. Of all my arcs, WickerWork Khan seems to be the most popular so it would make sense, too, so I guess I'll toss my panda bear into the ring, if you're up for it.

That'll also give me an excuse to go back over the text too; lately whenever I'm working on an arc it seems like if I go back over the text (word choice, etc) anywhere more than a week later, I'm always finding ways to make it better, pluss cachting teh ood spellinfg erorr ro typi..

And most of the cars still look like like 70s land-yachts.