1st shot at writing a CoH story!


Captain_Alpha_EU

 

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Hi guys,

Got nothing better 2 do 2day so I'm gonna have a crack at writing a story on here! No planning done jus all of the top of my head So have a good look and tell me what you think!

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The Battle for Siren’s Call

A Bleak sun rose on the battlegrounds of Siren’s Call. Commander Cortez of the longbow 12th company stood confidently at the heroes’ outpost smoking a cigar with a laid back smirk, certain that victory was in the hands of the Longbow. In the distance he saw someone running towards him at an alarming speed with the unmistakable look of fear in his eyes.
“Private! What the hell are you doing back here! Where is the rest of your task force! Jones took a deep breath and started shivering.
“Wherever I ran, all I could hear was gunfire, slaughter and the clanking of blades, I lost my cool in there Commander, I should have stood my ground but the Villains got the better of me….. I am a failure to you, the Longbow and the people of Paragon”. The young private fell to his knees in despair.
“Get up you fool! You think crying is going to bring back your comrades! For all we know they could still be holding out in there! I have faith in all my Soldiers… well nearly all of them” Commander Cortez looked down at Private Jones and gave him a disappointed look. He took several steps forward and unsheathed his katana.
“This day is not a defeat Private! Our iron will outmatches their lust for evil.” Private Jones staggered back to his feet having regained some of his morale from Cortez’s words of wisdom.
“Jones, now is a chance to redeem yourself, show me that you are not a coward!” Get back into the fray and find out what has happened to our task force!” You’ll be going with the reserve Force. Watch your back, the last thing I need today is more bad news… such as your failure!” Private Jones nodded and set off with the rest of the force. Just before they were about to set off Cortez tapped the Captain’s shoulder and angrily whispered,
“Make sure he doesn’t mess this mission up, if I don’t see a victorious band of heroes come back there will be hell to pay trust me!” The Force Captain took a sharp stare at Cortez’s eyes and set off.
Seconds seemed like hours to Jones as he nervously staggered through the sinister streets of Siren’s Call. Grasping his Assault Rifle tightly he could hear laughter in the distance. At first he just ignored it and muttered “Focus… Focus” But then a Longbow soldier yelled out “ARACHNOS INCOMING! IT’S AN AMBUSH! TAKE COVER!” Energy bolts flew downwards on the heroes and they immediately fired back in a flurry of panic.
“They’re on the rooftops! Grenadier! Hit em’ with all you got!” The Captain yelled.
“At once sir!” The Grenadier shouted. He raised his bulky grenade launcher at the rooftops and fired several volleys at the Arachnos. A wail of despair followed the volleys as the Arachnos soldiers fell like raindrops onto the city streets. Jones, not being the best soldier to retaliate to surprise skirmishes he lifted his rifle, closed his eyes and fired in all directions imaginable, at one stage he even fired at the floor! After the Captain ordered the Longbow to cease fire silence once again reigned. The Force Captain walked angrily over to Jones, pushed him and shouted,
“What the hell were you thinking Jones! Didn’t they ever tell you to shoot with your eyes open in training! The rest of the force started to snigger and Jones had an abrupt look of embarrassment on his face.
“I apologise sir, my nerves got the better of me” The Captain, looking slightly puzzled stepped back.
“Nerves! Nerves! These are Arachnos! They are scum who serve in a pathetic allegiance! If Nerves have any part to play in this battle they should be the ones with the Nerves getting the better of them.” The Captain turned around and started marching deeper into Siren’s Call.
“Onwards Longbow! We have a long way to go yet!”.

Right thats it.... I'm gonna wait n see if u guys think its any good and if you think there should be a part 2!


 

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Very nice little bit there Captain
One tiny gripe, but I always find it gives the story that extra sheen, it does sound petty but italicise the dialogue, Really it makes it easier to read
Anyway, good going!