ArrowRose

I tried it by ID first and I can't find it. Can you still find it?

I also could not find it, but when searching on Gno Man, I found some interesting titles including "How many ninjas can fit in a casino?", "Smurfs Want Our Women", and "I am an empty mission. Please ignore me."

Thank you so much for your review. This made my day.

I added a rescue animation and that works better.

I am so glad that you enjoyed this.

I agree and I implemented this change.

There are lots of them in mission 1. If I put more in they spawn too close to the Tuatha and end up dying in battle. This still occasionally happens and I put in some dialog to handle that.

All of your reviews make me smile, but this one made me smile most of all.

Thank you so much for playing my arc, for your detailed review, and especially for getting this information to me before the contest deadline. I really appreciated that!

I fixed all the typos and punctuation mistakes that you pointed out.

Below are some issues that you raised and my responses:

This is a bug (or a feature) of MA. All of them are release captive with a surrounding group of ally. They will never attack you, but the tab takes you to them (I am assuming that's what you mean).

You, the player took it because the contact said: "look around while you're there and see if you can find any information that might help us."

The name Master Marvel was chosen because in Kansas the Wizard of Oz was Professor Marvel.

In the wrap up for this mission, Dorothy says: " That pamphlet you found might be just the break we needed. Master Marvel may have the answers we have been seeking." She says this because he is (per my arc version of Paragon City) well-known.

Then at the start of mission 4, you are told a bit more: "Master Marvel is a great and powerful wizard who seems to know about almost everything that transpires in Paragon City. I think he may have the answers we seek. So, I need you to go see Master Marvel."

The fact that you the player does not know exactly what is going on here is by intent. In the Wizard of Oz, the characters are sent to the Wizard for answers, so to parallel that, you are sent to Master Marvel for answers.

They are here for several reasons. The first one being that it is their ship. The second reason is because just as the Winter Hord represent coldness in mission 2, they represent fear. The issue with Captain Courageous is that he is afraid. I felt of the villains available at that level, they best represented fear. Lastly, I wanted the player to have different enemies to fight in each mission. In the first version of my first arc, I received lots of complaints about fighting the same customs in every mission.

I love this idea! Do you know how I can technically implement this without getting level range warnings? The arc is now 5-15.

I noticed that many people use clues to describe what has happened and this is a technique I may use in future arcs. In this arc all my clues are tangible items and in this case I want to keep the style consistent. If I think of something physical that makes sense here that I can have you find on Marvel to use as a clue, I will, space permitting.

I believe I added a bit more since you played. It now says:

"Oh, thank you so much for bringing Master Marvel to us. While some believe that he is a humbug, his brochure description, you know, the part which read "Master Marvel never guesses, he knows" proved to be apt.

He talked to Ms. Liberty and after some assurances that we would leave him in peace, he provided us with all the answers we sought. I'm afraid we need your help one last time."

I don't tell you what the answers are on purpose at this point to make you want to keep playing, but I don't make you wait long. At the beginning of mission 5, Dorothy tells you:

" Master Marvel has revealed all. The Wicked One has been using a mystic brew to suppress the powers of our heroes. This brew combined with her mystic powers causes the heroes to doubt the very essence of who they are. This doubt renders them powerless. The power that each hero had is still present, but it is suppressed. To restore the hero's powers, we must simply restore the hero's belief in him or herself."

It was a huge help that you found this and gave me the chance to fix this before the contest. I gave them generic, but appropriate bios because I didn't have time at that point to create unique good ones. I think, space permitting, I will give each a unique bio.

She is a gravity control primary, with a martial artist seconday. I want to keep the gravity control, because things flying around fits with the storm that brought Dorothy to OZ. I picked martial arts because it seemed easy for lowbies to handle. If you have another suggestion for a secondary that will be easy for lowbies, I will definitely change it, because you are right that her being a martial artist does not really make sense.

I am glad that you liked it overall. The first three missions parallel the Wizard of Oz. Each hero is encountered one at a time.

They only advance the story in the sense that you find each hero.

I intentially do not tell you what is going on or give many clues because to parellel the Wizard of Oz, Master Marvel has all the answers. You are not supposed to know what is really going on until after you meet him.

I really appreciate the time and effort that you put into this review.

Thanks again so much!

I agree completely. This arc is definitely worthy of a Dev's Choice as is the author. She has proved to be very versatile by writing comedy arcs that really brighten my day and now two serious arcs, both of which I think are worthy of a Dev's Choice.

Thank you so much for playing and taking the time to provide such detailed comments.

Below are some responses to your comments:

You are playing as yourself but as you mentioned you have talked with your former mentor and " He suggested you talk to his friend, Dr. Allura. After months of meeting with her, you find yourself here." So what happened is you have already been brainwashed, or partially so by Dr. Allura. Angela is giving you a series of tests to see how effective the brainwashing was. She is asking you to do evil things and if you perform the tasks and she judges you ready, then you will become a full member of the Greater Good.

I realize that most people hate having their character hijacked so to speak and that they take offense if they are made to do things that their hero would not do in an MA arc. That is why I put a warning in the arc description. As you know the nature of the challenge was to have a hero do evil for the greater good. My feeling is that many people will dislike this arc simply because they do not like how this arc will make their hero behave.

I am glad you like Nikki's design. Originally you had to lead her to the door, but some people found that annoying. I like your suggestion of making her a non-combat follow, because you are right that her running out makes no sense.

I loved this comment. It gave me my smile for the day

This is a good thought and space permitting, I may implement this.

I did not think that this arc fit the fairy tale like style, but my other two major arcs most definately do. Perhaps it was the use of symbolic names that made you think so? I am curious to see if you ever play my one mission arc Don't Freak if you think it does as well. My Mom is to blame for this fairy tale style I think since she read me all 30 plus Oz books when I was a kid. Since then I have read lots of science fiction and action stories so for my next arc I am going to make an effort at a different style.

As I mentioned above, your willingness to do evil was because you were already brainwashed. I felt the missions progressed because in the first one you just took money to give to the poor, in the second you broke an "innocent man" out of prision, but in the third, you kidnapped a child.

I am not sure what you are looking for here. Perhaps something could be said by Angela after the last mission. I will think about this. If you have anything specific, let me know.

This is a good point. In the bank job, I think it can make sense, as this was a set up test. You are right about the jail cell. I think it would make more sense if someone else slipped you the note (perhaps a guard). It is unlikely Angela could have hidden a note on Mr. Worthington himself.

Angela was not actually brainwashed. She was playing along to look for that someone that she thought could help bring down the Greater Good. My thought was she had a brother or loved one who was taken in by them and who died in their service. Perhaps if I write this into the end of mission 4, it will tie up the loose ends?


You gave me some very valuable input that I think can help me make this a better arc. Thank you so much for looking beyond your dislike of a fairy tale style and providing me with very objective and very usefull comments.

Thanks again so much!

Thanks so much for the review! As always your review made me smile.

I have some questions on the things you did not like.

The fact that this might be confusing entered my mind, which is why I added the explanation after the mission.

Do you think it would be clearer if the group of the Office Freaks was changed to Efficiency Inc. or would it be better if all the enemies were Freaks?

If you think it would be better if all the enemies were freaks, then I need to decide who to use as hostages. Like you, I really like the map, so I don't want to change it. The map only allows for 3 hostages so I would either keep the hostages I have now, who are parallels of people on the Office (which btw I never saw - I read the Wiki) or I would use my own custom enemies whose bios are composites of people I have worked with over the years. Do you have an opinion as to which would be better?


The range was dictated by the level of the Freaks I used in the arc. I was able to solo it on a 31 blaster.

I have a question based on your in-game comment. You noted that the robotic caps talk looked odd with the lowercase name which came from $name. Is there a way to make that name uppercase?

Based on your comments I am leaning heavily towards making all the enemies Freaks. This would remove the issue of worrying about annoying custom powers. Do you think this would make the arc better?

Thanks again for your input

I never mind waiting. I know how much time and effort you all put into your threads.

I was scared by the caps and I couldn't find a fear emote to use, but I wanted to be sure he knew I never saw the request for no more.

I'm sorry.

I saw your post on March 5th, saying you were back and taking submissions for 1, 2 and 3 mission arcs only.

I somehow missed the post where you said you no more submissions and since we had spoken via PM, I assumed it was OK.

If you are too busy it's fine.